Is my sonnet good? please help me!!?

It's better than many I see here, but before you start celebrating let me tell you the rest of the story. You have some terribly forced rhymes here (wrinkles and Rip Van Winkle [no 's']... really?!) and that is very damaging. Also, you operate as if you think that counting syllables is the same as making your sonnet metric; it's not the same. A line of iambic pentameter is five two-syllable iambic feet, with each of those feet comprised of an unaccented syllable followed by an accented one; your meter simply is too irregular for me to give you the seal of approval. Because of the rush to rhyme, your meaning has been diluted and your poem is unfocused, or perhaps I should say it is focused enough for me to make an educated guess about what you intended with some confidence, and yet unfocused enough for me to say that you have lost your way in an effort to rhyme. The number one task of the poet is to make meaning and everything else pales beside it; to learn how to do that, and the role that rhetorical structure, ornaments, trope, and rhyme play in that making of meaning, is the task of becoming a poet.