I really like how it sounds kind of like a fighting knight or medieval but then again it sounds like you're taking on reality and being forced into that battle. I love it. But I'd change the whole red, warm, and deep, this wound will forever seep, to something like red, warm, and deep, my heart is no longer mine to keep. or something like that, if you'd like. :) Good luck , and really good poem.
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